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In time I think I will learn to love the snow
that keeps me inside and away from lackluster screens.
You shouldn’t forget the luck that keeps me outside.  

Some day I will lock my door, thermostat at its bottom
far more bitter then the streets, safe comfort in
one… breath turns to ice in front of me, and falls off my mouth, like,
so slowly I can feel my lips
bend
…touching, scratching, twisting infection,
affecting the heart and the head but, gutless guts
left to burn in their stead, having me taste every second
and me, (re collecting sweet looks),
spits out all the bitter after tastes.

Huge white spots crowd my screen and wishes of how to be
not including, how I am able to breathe with this tremendous
heat.

So sandy neck that can’t move to speak with pride,
sits and sweats on my wrecked base, and my
(re)collection never ends with today or the next after this
because I can’t squeeze anyone like that…
Not once, not ever again.
©2004-2009 ~dulcetblossom
:icondulcetblossom:

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this is so bitter, i just realized. :heart:

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:iconundefinability:
I really enjoyed the long lines with this.

That's about all I can say at the moment, though.

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:iconmaarja:
i really liked this.... you are marvelous. the opening line is fuckin amazing. this sounds like you wrote it in one breath. when i read it, i read it (swallowed it) in one breath. that's all it takes for this to sink in. it's the neverending flow which keeps me in this poem. you have done a fantastic job. thanks!

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~maarja~

:bulletpurple: :bulletpurple: to hope for better love, better friends, better life is like hoping to drown in better water :bulletpurple: :bulletpurple:
:icondulcetblossom:
thank you so much for your kind words, and the favorite :heart:
:iconmaarja:
hey no problem! :) :hug:

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~maarja~

:bulletpurple: :bulletpurple: to hope for better love, better friends, better life is like hoping to drown in better water :bulletpurple: :bulletpurple:
:iconandeverythingafter:
In time I think I will learn to love the snow
that keeps me inside and away from lackluster screens.
you shouldn’t forget the luck that keeps me outside.

yes, yes, YES.

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~there's small choice in rotting apples~
:iconmothkiss:
My skin is crawling with conflict. I like to feel how you feel things. At least infused with my own inflection and imagination, and I thank you for starting it up, again and again. You're a brilliant young thing, whether it matters or not. X
:icondulcetblossom:
heh, thank you, i think that may have made my day up to this point. :kiss:
:iconmothkiss:
That wasn't even my aim, but glorious news anyway. Sharing is such splendid fun. You're just splendid. :kiss: X

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